These facts are related to me. I want to tell you the first among them.
I know that I am happy when I watch movies, because movies are very fun.
When I watch movie, I can feel huge excitement. So, I feel joy which makes me feel happier.
My favorite movie is "3idiots" which told me many lessons.
Also, it's very exciting and interesting.
I know that I can study and learn a lot when I travel because travel is the best thing.
It teaches me a lot of things. I can know about the culture, history, or famous things of other countries.Also, travel is very enjoyable.
It's very exciting to meet new people, make a relationship, and play with them.
So after I come back from travel, I can see my body and mind all have grown.
I also Know that music makes me relaxed, because when I am tired, angry, or sad, music makes me feel better. It excite me . Furthermore, it appeases my anger or pain.
My favorite music is "You raise me up" because, its lyrics are very awesome.
And it is very comfortable to listen when I am tired or feel alone.
It will give you some more power, too.
My favorite music group is "Beatles".
It is a very old rock band, but when I listen to their music, I can feel that they are real: their poor situation, their solitude.
These are the three things that I know about me.
I like to watch movies, listen to music, and travel the world.
And, when I have a free time, I usually watch a movie or listen to music.
Along with my family, I frequently go somewhere outside of my city
to travel by car, train, or airplain.
Thank you for sharing. Good job! Please work on your introduction however and try to capture the reader's attention with it. Outline briefly the three things you plan to write about in the intro.
ReplyDeleteYou also need to put spaces between the paragraphs.
I hope you will use my comments to imrpove your writing. Good luck!